Slam Response

This morning, December 15th, 2010, our class had a wonderful poetry slam. So Miss P, asked us to write a post about this slam.

 a) What did you learn from Greg and Beth Ann (the slam poets)?

I learned to be proud of my work no matter what. And even If you mess up with your poem no one is going to realize because you're the only one who knows. Other than that, they thought us about the cadence that different people have in the way they preform their poems. I also think that also cadance can change according to the emotions and words in the poem.


b.) When writing your own poem, what did you use as inspiration?

 First of all. my inspiration was a movie that I watched once about ladies selling their bodies  for a pay and then turned into violence. Second of all. Facebook was one of my inspirations too, because before I got down to my poem I was checking my Facebook and found a lot of swearing (nasty language) going on in almost everything other post I read that was on my news feed. Third of all, war that is going on in my country and other places in the world. They really should get a lot of care and thought to those ones in violent wars and life a really harsh life. 


c.) What are you most proud of from your poem or your presentation of it?

The most thing I was proud of from my poem is that this is my first poem with a lot of rhyming in it which made it flow more for the listeners and it also made sense at the same time. And the thing that I was proud of from my presentation was that I didn't mess up that much I might have messed up a little but I think I managed to make it not too obvious so that is one thing I was happy about. I also wasn't that nervous when I got up and I was pretty calm so that helped as well.


d.) How did you feel before you performed?
I felt I bit nervous and I was shaking as well. But as I got into the poem, I was pretty calm and excited and flew into the world of poetry.

 e.) How did you feel AFTER you performed?
I felt really pumped up and I wished I had more poems with me to preform!


f.) What would you change about your own poem or performance for next time?

I would try to fully memorize it so my performance would have been better rather than me having to look after every stanza to make sure what's next.


g.) What did you learn/like about someone else's poem?

I really liked and learned something from everyone's poem. Each person in the class had a really wonderful message in their poem and was very fluent and touching.




MY POEM:

I was walking down a path, so hoary with many puddles

I tumbled, I crawled, and I managed to slip through the crack,

I managed to handle the troubles.

I encountered hate, I encountered love, and I encountered violence,

And violence and another great deal of violence.

Not talking about the violence you touch while trying to play the violin

But the war violence, the world's violence, 

Why can't peace be our next of kin?  

You call it a joke, hitting became a joke, swearing on people became a joke,

Bullying became a joke. 

Violence has become an issue. 

It can be acted not just spoke.

I went on the cyber world,

 I found ever line had swear words, people writing in backwards.

Nasty passwords. 

Can't violence be recorded in your passports? 

Oh, sorry, I made a mistake it's only there for transports and airports.

  

I encountered hate, I encountered love, and I encountered violence,

And violence and another great deal of violence

Thought I'd shake it off by watching a T.V show, 

Reporting 2 bombs is Palestine,

300 lost bodies in Afghanistan

My mind got blown, violence has grown, planes on postpone.

Other than that, we're feeding violence with our nasty language on the cellular phone. 

 So now I dressed and walked down the road, 

13 years-old girl with a pocket knife,

16 years-old boy with matches and gas and burning public places calling it fun 

20 years-old  dude with a gun, 

Do you call this a normal life? 

I encountered hate, I encountered love, and I encountered violence,

And violence and another great deal of violence.

Now I crawled into bed, thinking about what I saw, 

It burnt threw me like getting cut by a bear claw. 

It dropped my lower jaw.

Violence seems like common law.  

My eyes went shut, found the same story, my violent day. 

Ladies selling their bodies for a small pay. 

Is this what we want to live with? 

Every time in my dream I try to stop it, 

I seem to be too weak; I am smaller than the violence's smallest width. 

I encountered hate, I encountered love, and I encountered violence,

And violence and another great deal of violence. 

Greg 'Ritalin' Frankson:

His nickname is a real medicine that treats, but he treats hearts with deep words that are unable to defeat.

Beth ann Fisher

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Her words sink deep to the spirit, with gestures and body language I garantee you'll truly feel it.

Quote of the day. December 12th, 2010.

Sometimes reaching goals is just a big ambition that is achieved by perseverance and hope. 

-Haneen

321 Slam Poetry workshop respone

3 things that you are looking forward to learning, developing or using in your poetry over the course of our Slam workshops.

• To learn how to fit so many different vocabulary with the same syllables and put them together to make a sense and project a vivid image in the reader's head.
• I would like to develop my choice of similes to make them more poetic and pictorial.
• I would also like to work on not getting nervous in front of the audience.

2 things that Greg or Beth Anne reinforced that we have already been doing in class, or you are already using in your own writing.

• A poem don't have to rhyme to be a  poem. They also said that any type of text is poetry, so basically now I am typing a poem and you are ready a poem too! 
• Don't be ashamed of your work. Always be proud of who you are and your capability. 

1 poem that you wrote yesterday.


Heart is the pumper in the humans body
pumping every kind of feeling
Erupting to the other parts
pumping and revealing
revealing that it's the bank for multiple things

not only vitamins , blood and cells
but also an eraser for thoughts, pain and swells
It's the main feelings bank
can hold more than a car's oil tank


It can be broken in emotion but not in reality
who ever thinks that isn't going through mentality
they sure know it's only a way for spirit to be evoked
I repeat it's just another word for emotional broke

Professor Scott 2nd Visit!

We are honored to have a Great historian/ storyteller to come to our class and talk to us about history. He tells history as if he's telling a story. It's Great! I am just reflecting to Miss P about  his 2nd visit to our class.

What did you learn ?

-First  cotton mill was created in ,1844, in Quebec.

-Canadians were the first to invent many things. (something we should be proud of!) 

-Colonel John By is the genius who built the Rideau Canal. 

Which technology interested you?

Telegraph is the technology that interested the most.

 How did it impact society?

  

-Without morse cod and telegraphs we would have no telephones or any other way of communication. 

-The telegraph lead to phonograph, telephone, then radio,  and then photography and then the other media in these days such as TV, Internet. 

-It impacted our society in many ways such as:-  It was a small machine that worked with dots and dashes. (in the picture below)

This is my name in morse code: 

....   .-    -.     .     .   -.

(H)  (A) (N) (E) (E) (N)

- It was only a small machine and then went through changes with time and generations to become more advanced. This lead to the advanced ways of communications we have now. 

Tie into a big Idea. 

I would tie this into our BIG History idea; Every big event begins with a small step. 

 I would tie it into that one because without telegraphs, automobiles, etc,we would not have had those advanced technologies. So every big technology started off as a simple machine.

 Before: 

After: 

JOKE:

AWESOME THING #1001!

After exploring  1000 Awesome things, seeing old people holding hands is the  most awesome thing that happens to me.


      Seeing old people holding hands brings back hope into me. Two years have passed now, and I can't find the person that likes me in return. So seeing old people holding hands brings the hope back that I will find the right person one day and we will be doing the same thing when our hair becomes white as snow and curly.


      The first thing every person says when they see old people holding hands is "AWWWWW"! When I see old people holding hands the phrase that comes to my mind is "Hope they'll live longer, and grow the love more and more. And thank you for pouring hope back into me."


THANK YOU OLD PEOPLE! I hope love grows in every heart with every heartbeat!

 #364 When you get caught in the rain and you just don't care Is my second AWESOME!

Getting caught in the rain is one of  the best feelings ever. If just feels that it rained just for YOU.  It's a gift from god. It's  like you have been blessed. This is also a good way to brush off the thoughts that have been going on on your mind all day. It's just awesome! 



#362 Not making plans

It's just amazing. Making plans don't always work out. I Just like to go with the flow. Just like mummies, they're so light that they fly with the smallest wind blow. It's also like canoeing without paddles; the water is your paddles.  The best thing is to let life navigate you.



 Hope you guys enjoyed my AWESOME post!

BOOST UP YOUR SELF ESTEEM PEOPLE!

Hello Fellows!

I am writing this to tell you BOOST UP YOUR SELF ESTEEM PEOPLE!
Everyday, you look in the mirror and say some of the following:- (don't deny it because we all do it!)
1. I wish I was prettier.
2. I wish I was skinnier.
3. I wish I didn't have that pimple.
4. I wish my hair was longer.
5. I wish my body was more muscular. (for boys)
6. Oh my god! I am having a bad hair day!


There's a lot more than that. Here's a little tip my friends. Whenever you look in the mirror just think of one thing, that you're fabulous just the way you are!

If people try to put you down by saying mean things to you, just think of one thing. You are who you are. People who actually like you, would accept you the way you are no matter how good or bad you look! Acceptance is one of the relatives to love. If you love the person, you have to accept them.

People who change the way they look or the way they act to please others have no clue where that can lead them! Here's a quote I made up about changing to please others.

"Never change to please a human being. Otherwise, YOU'RE losing and THEY'RE winning."


This is true! First of all, if you change the way you look just to please someone, you're losing yourself and losing your natural beauty, and the way people were used to you. Second of all, if you change the way you act, people are going to notice it which might reflect an image about you that you have a low self esteem! This is something you absolutely don't want, right? Third of all, you're not being yourself! Just be yourself and don't give attention to what people think.


I hope this helped people who change to please others and forget about who they are!

BE YOURSELF PEOPLE!

Quote of the day. November 28th, 2010.

Understand yourself before trying to understand others.


-Haneen